Activity 3: Persuasive Writing
Wednesday 1st April. Task 3: Can you fix Ms Monaghan's writing?
Thank you so much for all the delicious Easter egg inventions you've been sending me. They have been making my mouth water. I have been working on my persuasive writing for my chocolate egg, but I'm not sure it's very good. Could you make it better? Feel free to change all of it! You could use:
Can you remember some of the techniques you used when you were writing your Turkish Deligh adverts? You might need to check my punctuation too. Write your improved version into your book.
try this chocolate egg it has white chocolate on the outside and then lemon and orange and it tastes ok. once you eat it you might want to keep eating and eating it and it tastes nice. emma ate it and she thought other chocolate was boring so she ate this chocolate and then she felt ok. the outside of the chocolate goes in your mouth and it melts and then the next bit is lemon and then the next bit is orange and if you try it it might make you feel happy.
Tuesday 31st March. Task 2: Slogans and rhetorical questions.
I've seen some great egg-samples (examples) of Easter eggs. Thank you for sending them to me. Willy Wonka should get some advice from Year 3 about amazing chocolate inventions - you certainly have some interesting ideas! The next job is to design a slogan and rhetorical question for your Easter egg. Can you remember this from our Turkish Delight adverts? An example might be:
Rhetorical question - Why settle for the same boring chocolate egg? Try something eggstra-ordinary today! (Can you spot the play on words?)
Slogan - Cheese and gherkin eggs - they're cracking!
Try to write two or three different rhetorical questions and slogans, then decide which one you like the best. You'll be able to use it in tomorrow's writing.
Monday 30th March. Task 1: Design your own Easter egg
Today, you are going to design your own Easter egg. It can be any flavour or combination of flavours you like.... be creative! How about a creamy white chocolate shell, filled with zingy lemon custard and a melting orange centre? No? Just me? If you don't like chocolate think about other flavours that might work: a jelly-sweet shell, marshmallow fluff filling and a surprise Turkish Delight core. Maybe you don't like sweets...you could have a crunchy crisp exterior, a tangy cheese layer and a surprise gherkin in the middle! Mmmmm, sounds delicious!
Your job today is to draw and label your egg - use lots of great adjectives to describe it. Once you've done that, design the packaging: remember to make it nice and colourful so it's really eye catching. You're also going to think of a name for your egg...I thought Lemon Zinger might work for the first one, what do you think? You can print out the egg pdf for your design or just draw them in your book, but remember to make them big enough.
Friday: Task 3 - Write your monster poem
Today you are going to write your narrative poem using all of the ideas from yesterday's planning. Read through the poems from the first day again before you begin. Can you find rhyme, rhythm, alliteration or similes? See if you can include one or more of these techniques in your poem. You can always email me your work - I would love to see them. (firstname.lastname@example.org)
Thursday: Task 2 - Planning your own poem.
The type of poem we're writing today is a narrative poem, which means it tells a story. (Can you remember the other type of poem we looked at in class?).
Read the poems from yesterday again, they both tell a very different story: what were they about?
Draw a picture of the monster that will appear in your poem. Is it cute, fluffy and friendly? Or fierce, ferocious and slimy? What colour is it? Once you have drawn it write some adjectives around the outside to describe it.
Next, think about the kind of adventure your monster can go on. Where would you go with it? How do you discover the monster? You can print out and use the planning sheet above or just write your ideas straight into your pink book. Don't forget to make your writing exciting - use your senses to bring your monster to life. You could also use adjectives, adverbs, similes, alliteration or onomatopoeia.
Wednesday: Task 1 - Which poem is your favourite?
To begin, we will have a look at two different poems. Poetry is best read out loud - so have a go, or ask someone if they could read it to you. Read it through a few times. Can you make it sound exciting (you could even try and learn it off by heart if you wanted a real challenge!) Then decide which poem you like best and explain why you like it. You can talk or write about it in your pink book - you could even copy the poem into your book and practise your handwriting at the same time! Once you have done this, draw a picture of what you think the monster in your favourite poem looks like. Around the outside of your picture write some adjectives to describe it.
The Sabre-Toothed Huggle
On the way to school I met
A monster all fluffy and blue
He wasn’t a lost pet
And he was about 6 foot 2.
His teeth were pointy and white
Yet he was a friendly creature
When he asked to go and fly a kite
‘Of course!’ said my teacher.
We felt the wind pull the kite string
We smelt BBQ on the breeze
We played on the swings
And then climbed up the trees.
Today was amazing, today was just brill
I hope Huggle visits again, he said he will!
The Fiend was born in a volcano
It has molten-red skin and yellow eyes that glow
It smells smoky and has crooked teeth
It is mean and likes chaos.
It left the volcano on an adventure
It needed to be nasty and make people sad
But it met me on the beach.
I trapped The Fiend in a hole I’d dug
And it sizzled as the tide came in
Its flaming skin turned blue
‘I’m sorry,’ it said and turned to dust.
‘Hooray! You saved us!’ the people said
And I smiled at them with my crooked teeth and yellow eyes that glowed …
Activity 1: Story starter
Look closely at the picture and talk about what you think might be happening. What do you notice? How would you feel if this was happening to you? What do you think you would see and hear? Then think about the kind of story you would like to write - is it going to be an adventure story, a mystery story or a funny story.....or something completely different?